Redux

This particular piece I've redone for the third time now (the other two are somewhere earlier in this blog). I can never seem to be happy with it, and I will make it work if it kills me! (I should probably be more careful about saying things like that). So what do you think?

And yes, I've been on a black and white kick lately. Don't know why, but there's something about it that makes it so nice and moody to me.
This is a fake screenshot that I did for a game for a potential client. I usually don't like showing stuff done professionally on my blog so I can avoid legal drama, but this one got axed anyway so I don't think it'll be a problem. It's done in Flash, by the way.